I think the lens flare is still a little much and would dial it back a bit, or use a lens flare brush instead of the render option. I also don’t care for the hot spots, but I think that’s just me rather than a problem with the concept. I tried to do a small one and a big one to see the distinction, and I think the small one looks fine but the big one is kind of messy.
On to part two:
Now, I started this for an eclipse, but as I got to this point I couldn’t help but think that this would be an absolutely awesome effect to use for someone’s eyes. Especially my characters of Khait and Laura/Erilon. I will definitely be playing with this some more.